- Part B (Points: 20)
- Due: Posted as comments on the Now Loading Blog by the start of school, Sunday, July 31, 2011. By this time, you should be able to check Snap Grades for my comments and your points. If not, I'll post on the blog again.
- Directions:
- Prove your understanding and mastery of skillful use of language.
- Find two (2) articles and play with the language in the headline (see samples below)
- Articles must be current, within the past month
- Post the original headline and your revision, ALONG WITH THE FIRST PARAGRAPH OF THE ARTICLE, like the samples below.
- Prove your understanding and mastery of skillful use of language.
- Here's the catch....YOU CANNOT REPEAT ANY EXAMPLES!!! So the early bird gets the credit! Pokey little puppies must read all of the blog comments to be sure yours is a new one. NO CREDIT FOR DUPLICATE EXAMPLES
Samples
- Original Title: “Kauai bottled water company could fold”
Playing with Words:“County Shuts Tap on Kauai Bottled Water”
Article: The owner of a bottled water company on Kauai says he could go out of business because of legal action taken by Kauai County.The county claims the company is operating on agricultural land without seeking proper permits and potentially obtaining water from a public resource. - Original Title: “Agricultural disaster declared in 4 Hawaii counties”
Playing with Words: “From Sugar Bowl to Dust Bowl”
Article: Federal agricultural secretary Thomas Vilsack has designated all four Hawaii counties as agricultural disaster areas because of financial losses from the drought. - Original Title: “Nanakuli landfill operator sues city over park plans”
Playing with Words: “NO PARKING”
Article: The landowner of property in Nanakuli slated for expansion of the island's only construction and debris landfill is suing the city over the Hannemann administration's plan to use the land for a regional park.
Good luck! I look forward to seeing the results!
mrs s
13 comments:
Destrie Ranon (:
Original Title:"Rowling:'Never Say Never' To More 'Potter'"
Playing With Words: "Potter to cast another spell?"
Article:Will she or won't she? Although J.K. Rowling has said that "Harry Potter" ends with the seventh book, she's reserving the right to change her mind and extend the story.
Original Title:"Bag ban bill trashed again"
Playing With Words:"Bill gets the bag"
Article:Accusations of improper legislation on both sides of a proposed plastic bag ban stymied the Hawaii County Council on Thursday and delayed a proposal to cut public hearings short.
Original Title: High surf advisory for south shores
Playing with Words: Say Hi to the Ocean's Highs
We have rain clouds headed our way from the east.
The grey clouds moving towards the islands are the fuel for our windward showers tonight through the rest of the week.
Original Title: Space Shuttle Atlantis lifts Off On 'Sentimental Journey'
Playing with Words: Atlantis' Final Take Off
Space shuttle Atlantis lifted off Friday morning on the final mission of America's 30-year shuttle program, a thunderously poignant moment that drew people from around the world to watch.
-Melissa Ponce ^______^
Original Title: "Japanese Visitor Stabbed In Palolo Valley"
Playing with Words: "Palolo Attracts the 'Po-Po"
Article: The 24-year-old victim was taken to the hospital in good condition, but the incident is raising concern among tourists, and the visitor industry.
Original Title: "The First Lady of the N.B.A."
Playing with Words: "N.B.A. Wife also Shoots for Fame"
Article: To be fair, Mrs. Anthony, the wife of the basketball player Carmelo Anthony, is seemingly available for anything these days. Since her husband’s blockbuster trade to the New York Knicks from the Denver Nuggets in February, the couple have been popping up everywhere: “The View,” “The Wendy Williams Show,” the White House Correspondents’ Dinner. Every stage of their apartment hunt was reported by Page Six, as was Mr. Anthony’s recent helicopter ride to Southampton, N.Y., from Manhattan for dinner at Nobu.
Article #1:
Original Title: In South Sudan, cry of ‘freedom’ rings
Playing w/ Words: Let Freedom Ring
JUBA, South Sudan - The celebrations erupted at midnight. Thousands of revelers poured into Juba’s steamy streets in the predawn hours yesterday, hoisting enormous flags, singing, dancing, and leaping on the back of cars. “Freedom!’’ they screamed.
Article #2:
Original Title: Inspectors study NY roller coaster in vet's death
Playing w/ Words: Ride Of A Lifetime
DARIEN, N.Y. — Teams of inspectors were examining a 208-foot-tall amusement park roller coaster after a U.S. Army veteran who lost his legs to a roadside bomb in Iraq a few years ago was thrown from it to his death.
And still more great summer surprises! Four entries on the second assignment already! Awesome!
Here are my comments and assessments:
Destrie: Great job on this assignment as well. Your original rewrites are both clear and clever! Assessment: 20/20 points
Melissa: Nice job on the first re-write, with the pun on "highs." The second could probably use more play on words :) Assessment: 16/20 points
Brittany: Nice job...some considerations, though. For the first one, not sure if the slang "po-po" is generally understood or in general use. My other consideration is that the tone is kind of humorous, but the article is pretty serious. On the second, I see your play with "shoot" but when I first read the headline, I thought the wife had shot someone. Good effort overall, though. Assessment: 17/20 points
Raevyn: Assignments done out of order. Please see my comments on email. Thanks :)
mrs s
Original Title: Summer 2011 Nail Trends
Playing with words: Nail your Manicure with these New Trends!
Article: Not sure how to style your nails this summer? With so many options out there, it's hard to decide. At the recent International Beauty Show in Las Vegas, Beautylish was on the hunt for the next big trends in nails. From floral decals and metallic feathers to fabric prints and three-dimensional designs, we're going to show you which manicure styles will put your tips in the spotlight this season. Keep reading for three summer nail trends you don't want to miss!
Original Title: Heidi Montag Talks About Her New Restaurant Reality Show
Playing with words: Heidi Montag "Serves" us a New "Cutting" Edge Reality Show
Article: Heidi Montag isn’t getting into trouble on her new reality show as she has in the past and probably for good reason. Famous Food is about the cutthroat business of running a restaurant, not sunbathing and drinking with friends like her last TV appearances.
Original: Blake learns French for Chanel
Play on Words: ooh la la, Blake has more gossip to tell
Article: 'Gossip Girl' star, Blake Lively, was named the new face for Chanel and it inspired her to take upon learning the French language. Also, she started taking cooking classes and brushing up on art history in order to live up to the brand's reputation.
Original: Natalie's Sweet Gift For Her Man
Play on Words: Brise for Photo
Article: Natalie Portman buys a painting for her husband for $900. He loves the work of Philippe Halsman and bought a Ballerina portrait as they went shopping. The store didn't take credit cards so Natalie had to take out $900 in cash.
Kayla Dilda
1. Original Title :
"Coffee grown on the Big Island's rainy side"
Playing with words:
"The more rain, the Better the bean."
Article:
"[Our] beans are bigger because there's a lot more moisture here," Baysa said. The coffee "is less acidic also because of the rainfall."
2. Original Title:
"Honolulu event will light up the night on Memorial Day"
Playing with words:
"Memories light up magic Island."
Article:
One of Hawaii’s most dramatic annual celebrations will begin at sunset on Memorial Day, when more than 3,000 candle-lighted lanterns will be floated on the water, illuminating the ocean off Magic Island at Honolulu’s Ala Moana Beach Park.
The ceremony, which draws more than 40,000 people annually, honors the dead, with the lanterns bearing individual and community remembrances and prayers.
Original Title: "Midair Collision Kills Experienced Sky Diver"
Playing with Words: "Sky Die-vying"
Veteren sky diver Ashley "Ash" White, who had logged more than 12,500 jumps, died Sunday morning after colliding with another sky diver at an estimated speed of 180 mph before crashing into a field near Dillingham Airfield.
Original Title: "Texas Mother Delivers 16-Pounder"
Playing With Words: "Everythings Bigger In Texas"
A Texas mom expected a big baby but nothing like this: 16 pounds, 1 ounce.
Original Title: Green house unveiled in Kaimuki
Play on Words: Green House Sees the Light
HONOULU (HawaiiNewsNow) - A green sustainable home made its debut in Kaimuki Friday morning.
Original Title: Jeopardy! host injured after chasing burglar in SF
Play on Words: "Jeopardy!" Host in Jeopardy during Burglar Chase
"Jeopardy!" host Alex Trebek says he snapped his Achilles tendon while running after a burglar who had stolen cash, a bracelet and other items from his San Francisco hotel room.
-Leah Miyasato
Original Title: Burglary suspects exposed to hazardous materials
Play on Words: Burglars learn a lesson
Article: Two burglary suspects were taken to Queens Medical Center Wednesday morning after being exposed to hazardous materials.
According to police, two men attempted to burglarize a home that was being fumigated on Lusitana Street near Milo and Ohelo Lanes.
Original Title: Thousands get free help, haircuts, groceries at 'Convoy of Hope' event
Play on words: Lending A Helping Hand
Article: Thousands of people got help that they may not have otherwise received Saturday as a faith-based group made its first-ever visit to Hawaii.
They were drawn to Aloha Stadium for an event put on by "Convoy of Hope," based in Springfield, Mo.
-Rebekah Morales
Kai Tachino
Original Title: Schools Start Setting Higher Goals
Play on Words: Schools Take Goal-Setting to a New Level
In the new school year that kicks off today, public school teachers will begin rolling out tougher standards for math and reading, requiring students to dive into more complex texts and critical thinking.
Original Title: HPD Reaches Out With Facebook Page
Play on Words: Locals "Like" HPD
In its first month of operation, the Honolulu Police Department's Facebook page appears to have found its niche in the tenuous world of social media.
Original Title: "Rail deal moves ahead"
Play with words: Rail travels to success
Article:With all appeals from losing bidders denied, the Honolulu Authority for Rapid Transportation is now taking steps to iron out a contract with Ansaldo Honolulu.
Original Title:"Big Island man survives rare and deadly disease"
Playing with words:Graham McCumber won over disease
Article:
It's a rare disease that can be contracted from eating raw vegetables.
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